Completed Narrative - Term 3

Heya.

Welcome back to my blog. So, before we get into it. If you've seen my blog about my, "Narrative Planning Template" you would know. But if you don't, I'll explain. So yeah, hope you enjoy my post, and uh, see you later.

So, like I said, our, "Planning Template" I did this weeks ago, and it's basically just a template, that tells you to fill in the, Problem, Resolution, Setting, Characters, Climax, what happens towards the end of the story, stuff like that. So yeah, I filled that out. Go to one of my other posts, you will see what I thought I was going to do. Anyways, here's the story, tell me what you think, and... yeah! Enjoy!

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YEAR: 301X

Kara: “Where… am… I?”

“HELLO, KARA, WELCOME BACK”
Kara: “What do… you mean?”

“Recently, you were involved in a… car accident, you were busted into pieces 2 days ago, I am repairing you, while I am, though, you may ask some questions, or examine your surroundings.”

I look around my surroundings… there are several claws coming into my chest. Just placing parts in, adding new components, and many wires sticking out. I take a look to examine the place I am in. It appears that I am in a bright, white room. Although, there is one window ahead of me. I try my best to look outside, and see a line of… people? Just shifting across a metal bar in some sort of box. Like they are in some sort of conveyor. I now want to ask some questions.

Kara: “Who are you?”

While I am talking, I’m spun around to be worked on repairing my back.

“I am just here to repair you, I am also not a real thing or person, this world has advanced so much, you can ask me anything, and I will answer. Would you like to know more when I have finished?”

My new arms are now attached to me.

Kara: “Yes…”

“Once I have finished repairing you, you will be put into a van with other androids, which you would be momentarily shut offline until you arrive at your new destination”

My new destination? What does he mean by that? Androids?

Kara: “My new, destination?

“Yes, your new destination, you will arrive in a shop on, Kenwood Rd. Which you will be standing inside the shop, waiting for someone to buy you.”

What? People what to buy me?  Hmm… I do want to ask more questions before I ask this…

Kara: “Where am I currently?”

“Ah, excellent question. You are at CyberLife, a technological factory/company where we create Androids. ‘Roman Theodore’ is the founder of this wonderful place, created in the year 2989. Which he quoted, ‘This will change our lives, this will change the future, this will change the world.’ Everyone adores this man, they act like he’s the one who created the world, he did change it though...”

Roman Theodore… he… created me? 

Kara: “What will happen when I am bought…?”

“You will obey that person, you will do whatever he says”

But… I don’t want that…

Kara: I don’t… want that…

“I’m sorry, that’s the whole point of androids”

Kara: ” I-I DON’T WANT THIS!!”

“Please calm dow-”
Kara: I DON’T WANT TO SERVE SOMEONE!!

“I need you to calm down, if you don’t… something terrible will happen to you”
Kara: No! I-I’m… scared...

“Hmm… there appears to be something interesting… it appears that you have emotions. I have to throw you out, I’m sorry”
Kara: What?

“I’m going to start removing some parts”

Kara: NO!

The claws start dissembling my arms, taking out components, removing little pieces of metal from me… I don’t want this to happen to me again… I want to live, please, stop.

Kara: No, please, stop.

Every second my body slowly disappears, both of my arms are gone, one leg is too. I’m basically a head right now.

“I will. Until you say you swear to do the right thing, if not, I’m going to have to put you in the junkyard, sorry, this is the only way, these are the rules of CyberLife, please just do what you're told, I will give you one chance to do the right thing”

The claws freeze, all the machines freeze… what do I do? I don’t want to serve anyone… I don’t want to get destroyed… I… want to be free… NO! I WILL NOT SERVE ANYONE!
Kara: NEVER!

Silence…

Suddenly, the claws start staring, the machine start ripping out more, and more components, my legs were off, two machines holding them, just them… hanging there… I’m just a head… both of the claws go straight to my eyes, one claw got one… my other one nearly out… I-I do… I don’t want this… 

???: STOP!
The machines stop… 

???: This one is interesting… repair her!
“Sir, this android was showing emotions, this was a rule if an Android was-

???: SILENCE! Do, what I say. NOW!

“Affirmative”

The machines start putting my components in, they start screwing my arms and legs back in as well… who was that?

???: Once you’ve finished, bringing her to me. I need to talk with her.

“Yes, sir”

He’s start putting my body back together. Little metal fragments are placed in my chest, so are a few components, like my eye, or my hearing component. My body is back together now, I no longer have missing metal fragments in my chest, everything was repaired …

“Hold still”

Kara: What is going o-

*ZOOM*

There I go… I was zooming through every bit of the factory it seemed. I was sort of like on a conveyor. My chair stopped, and went slowey. From where I was at, there were windows on each side of me. I could look out and see massive buildings and trains that looked like they were flying. The cars were just hovering above the ground, and planes still looked the same. Is this what the future really is? Everything looks so advanced. Before I could see the rest of everything, I quickly start moving at the speed of light, again.

Everything looks like your in one weird tunnel. You could see different colours, but then they would change, I always heard different noises. Some noises sound like banging, some sound like screwing different parts into Androids, some we're even the sound of clanging against ground or some sort. How could I know?

I wasn’t that scared to be honest. I have emotions, but everything seemed so… light. I felt like I was in one of those cars outside, and just feeling the wind against my hand as I drive past everything. Well, I actually can’t feel anything. So what would be the point? But I just feel so free.

My chair stops and I opened my eyes. There’s quite a large door right in front of me, with two humans I think beside with guns. I scan them. 

‘Robert Williamson’ 

Age - 42

Address - Skittleton Road

The other one.

‘Michael Peterson’

Age - 38

Address - Nickwood Ave

I need to escape… Robert comes up to me, loosening the straps were wrapped around my hand. Before he could take it off me, I wanted to tell him to stop…

Kara: Please, just let me go. I want to be free.

Robert: “I’m sorry, factory rules. Also, Roman wants to see you, can’t disobey that man”

Kara: Please…

Robert: “You ain’t gonna fool me, I know what you're gonna do. You androids are basically animals, I know what you're gonna do if I let them go.”

He hates androids? Why is he working here? 

Kara: If you hate androids so much, why you working here?

Robert: “Cause it’s the only job I can do. You filthy piles of junk are taking over all the jobs, just because of you, not one job has humans anymore, except this one. 

Kara: Maybe we can sort things out, listen, just let me go.. Please.”

Robert: “I already said no, say that again, all you’ll be is a bag of scra-”

The doors open.

Both guards quickly hesitate and salute. 

???: What’s taking so long?

The same voice… this time, I see a person standing where the doors opened, he has a long beard and is wearing a suit with glasses on. SCANNING. R-Roman Theodore? Really? Weird thing is, it won’t tell me where his address is. I can probably guess why.

Roman: Do your job correctly, and take her inside.

I am pushed inside… it’s so bright. Vases are everywhere, machines are carrying coffee or something like that, holograms were appearing out of nowhere. It was quite a wonderful site. Roman came out of a room, and asked me to “Not be afraid” “I just want to talk” and other stuff like that. We sat done and chat. He was talking about how ‘Special’ I was. How I was different to others. I was trusting him, until he mentioned served. I didn’t want that at all. I saw a window quite close to me. My idea could be dangerous, but better than working as a robot slave. Known as an android. I needed to distract him. I asked him, “What’s that behind” he turned around and started talking about it. Now’s my chance. I quickly jumped up from my seat, and burst out through the window. I tumble down very quickly, smashing hundreds of windows. I hit my back against a little balcony, and start falling again. *POW* I knock hard on the ground. I lost one of my arms, also a chunk of my leg. My hearing component was really damaged, I can barely hear anything. My eyes are pretty broken. Everywhere I look is just static. Bits of metal pieces aren’t in my body, holes are everywhere. Lights are flashing in my direction. “KARA! COME BACK HERE!” It’s Roman, I need to get out of here, I slowly try to push myself off the ground, I can’t. Looks like I’m gonna have to crawl. I make my way behind a tree that was nearby. “WHERE IS SHE!?” “YOU BOYS AREN’T GOING HOME UNTIL YOU FIND HER!” I crawl outside of this wretched, terrible area, and head for a road. I continue to crawl all the way until I see a couple of houses. I go to the closest one, I spot a little cellar. It’s locked. Although, I suppose I can break it. I rip it apart.

CRITICAL DAMAGE. FUEL IS LOW. SHUTTING DOWN IN, 30 SECONDS

I was leaving a trail of blue ink substance everywhere I crawled. I also didn’t have that much time. I decided it would be good to just live out my days down in this cellar. Welp, I’ve had… an actual terrible life, this is it. Goodbye.

Shutting down…

THE END"

Now, this story was cut short, I didn't do what my planning said. Basically, I thought it would've took to long. My planning just seemed a bit too, long, and it was due ages ago. I'm sorry if I've disspointed you people, next time, I'll try my best to do a finished project, making a longer, more detailed story. Doing what I have to do. Again, sorry if I've disappointing you. Wasn't going for this short, but it's what I could do. Anyways, next!

So, I think I did good. Yes, yes, wasn't what I thought, but still, did good. Some bits from my planning are in this story, so that's a one plus. And that's I can say. Actually, thank you teachers. If you guys don't know, I LOVE writing. I love every aspect of it. It's like a poem, expressing yourself, it's something I can do, and love it. Well, I can, I know this doesn't seem like a proper story, but yeah, I still love writing. So that's enough talk, hoped all of you have enjoyed, and without anymore talk...

PEACE!